Gentle Tone
By
When thoughts escape onto the air
let words convey a gentle tone.
Protect the ones in which you care
when thoughts escape onto the air
for harsh discourse will seed despair
and won’t retract once it is sown.
When thoughts escape onto the air
let words convey a gentle tone
Aurora
By
When dusk’s descent unveils diminished blues,
diffused by silken sighs of dawning night,
to bid farewell with dancing golden hues
across the space where sky and land unite,
Aurora weaves amorphous bandeaus tight,
to flourish upon midnight blackened sky,
and set adornments free on zephyrs high.
Agree with many of the comments above - would add there is an ethereal quality to the flow of your words that gives one the impression that they are being heard rather than read - which is quite lovely. Beautiful pieces:)
Oh yes! Both excellent, Laurie! Glad I dropped in. Thanks for sharing these. :-)
Two wonderful pieces, Richard. I love the mystery of Halfway Point, and the humor in Geography. I'd like to more of your work.
The Costume just achieves the perfect mood. Wow!
Thanks for your kind comments and wonderful support... it means so much to me!
Very nice pieces Richard. The flow and meter were soothing and the words filled in as texture. Good to see your poems continue to reach ever more appreciative readers.
I love how your day unfolded and we can hear your thoughts. They dance with the ordinary is extracted with fragments of your emotions. The disconnect and connects all stirred through your view~ Wonderful! Congrats Laurie :D
Laurie such a gift you have for visceral images and outstanding prose. Such beautifully layered stanzas, I delight in reading them again and again. Wonderful!
Laurie, like your repetition in The Costume--"sit and sip and sew" so sublime!
Great pair, Laurie. This is one aspect of poetry that I have little talent for. I can't quite seem to get down what it takes to do interpersonal encounters. You've definitely shown marvelous examples of how it's done well. Thank you.
Laurie, these are wonderful. I love the ferocity of The Costume, ending with this soothing rhythm: "I smile, sip my coffee sit and sip and sew–." ...the demon having been exorcised, for now. :) Also love the double play in the title. And the tenderness, appreciation in That Look. Wonderful. Love your work. So happy to see it here.
Love them both, Laurie, but especially this one. Nice work, as always.