Fiction from Atanda Faruq Obatolu

January 22, 2016 Fiction , POETRY / FICTION

We today feature two short stories from Nigerian writer 

Atanda Faruq Obatolu: ‘My Friend, Abeeb’ and ‘The Story of a Marriage’.





My Friend, Abeeb



I know Abeeb Fuhad. I’m familiar with him as you are familiar with an old room. The thing about this sort of familiarity is that it occurs over a period of time, many, many years of close acquaintance bring new discoveries on some days as never before – you see things today that you’ve not before, and then see it tomorrow and realize it’s always been there. I love Abeeb Fuhad; he’s my best friend, arguably my only real friend, for he’s stuck with me no matter what. He’s stuck with me this long. But I don’t argue when people say things about him that aren’t so nice, basically because they are true, everything. Abeeb might not be a very nice person, but once you have his loyalty, you’ve got it forever. That’s why I stick with him too. That’s why I’ll stick with him to the end.



My name is Ridwan, and if I must pride myself, it’ll be as a writer. I’ve spent many years reading and reading – writers like George Orwell and Sefi Atta and now Harun Yahya – and writing. I write for a purpose; for my religion, and I belong to a committee in school called Ash-Shabaab Pen. Abeeb does too. Actually, he’s President of the committee and I’m Editor of the literary magazine we publish. And it is in those shoes I stand now, in this light drizzle. I’m waiting as ‘the Editor’, patiently, as is expected of an ‘akhiy’ (brother in Islam) like myself. I have no problem waiting like this; not only do I know that it is rewarding, I’m also well aware that the akhiy I’m supposed to be meeting is probably held up in the Sango traffic not very far away. Not anything he can help. I adjust my weight on my left limb and brush the grit off my trouser that had been splashed by a passerby.

Today is Friday, and I have yet to read the chapter of the Qur’an that is required of all Muslims on this auspicious day. I’m sure Abeeb has done that. Probably twelve times already. He spares no effort in observing rites like that; in serving his God. He’s faithful. He’s fanatic. And while sometimes I think it’s funny, other times, I’m annoyed by it. Most people are annoyed by it most times; it is exactly why a considerable number of our Jammah (congregation) have bad feelings towards him. The ones that don’t have a reverence for him that is borne of fear; they’re extremely careful around him. They pussyfoot. They think he’s some sort of god they ought to please. They make me laugh; even now their thought brings a smile to my face. Abeebullah. He carries himself with such confidence. Such prissiness.

My akhiy has arrived. Brother Isma’il; I recognize him from an earlier meeting in Abeokuta. He approaches with a pronounced limp, flanked at the left by an ukhtiy (sister in Islam), chicly clad as much for the occasion as for the day. He is slightly drenched, as is she. I smile as they approach, in pre-greeting. ‘Omo iya’1 says he as he takes my hand and pulls me into an embrace. Salam alaykum2. Salam alaykum. His beards leave a patch of wetness on the skin of my chin. I nod at his female companion. No iniquity can make me so much as touch her, basically because she’s female. Actually, it is by the grace of Allah that I can keep from touching females; that all brothers can.

‘Meet Sister Ganiyah,’ says Brother Isma’il as he adjusts his cap on his head. He’s a bit disheveled and his Ibadan accent is quite thick, but I know Abeeb will like him; the sort of knowledge that comes with experience. His trousers end way above his ankles, there’s a patch of blackness on his forehead and he said ‘Goh-ni-yyah’. He’s alright. Sister Ganiyah, however, is not. She wears a scarf, not a hijab3. Her gown is much too clingy and her face is heavily made up. Her faith is weak. ‘She’s my assistant.’

‘Salam alaykum.’ I smile nicely and she replies duly. She has a nice smile, but I’m not supposed to think about that. Abeeb wouldn’t even have noticed. He lowers his gaze; his faith is sahih4.



The two have come from the Federal University of Agriculture, Abeokuta, representatives of their committee Al-Mustakshif (literally The Pathfinder) to our own University of Lagos. It’s their first time in Lagos, and we’re meant to be planning the co-production of a magazine. We talk casually about the mission as we make for the college. Sister Ganiyah proves to be quite intelligent, her views on most things being very noble, very respectable. And she’s a stunning writer. In the course of the journey, I make her show me some things she’s just written – poems, articles, short stories – and I am struck by a particular short story she wrote. It’s called Alfa Malik. Such ordinary title for a brilliant piece of fiction. And all the while, Brother Isma’il sits next to me, silently reading the Qur’an from his phone.



When we finally meet Abeeb in his office in the mosque’s secretariat, I’ve developed a curious fondness for Sister Ganiyah. No, no, not in the lustful, sinful way. It is in the way that you feel when you meet a person very similar to you. And I’ve learnt quite a lot about her too, simply because she can’t stop talking. But Abeeb doesn’t approve of her. The moment she enters his office, he has the look on his face of someone that’s just seen a troll. He doesn’t look at her. My heartbeat fastens; he’s going to embarrass her.

Abeeb is tall, much taller than I, and the severe look that is a result of his full beard2 only makes his appearance all the more intimidating. Brother Isma’il is duly intimidated. He pussyfoots. He’s weak. When Abeeb takes his hand, he holds it longer than usual and I know what he’s doing: he’s checking to see if his guest’s fingernails are well-trimmed. They are, and Abeeb smiles nicely at him. He approves of him; his faith is alright. But the silence he gives Sister Ganiyah is profound, disconcerting, as if she’s not there. And in the course of our conversation, I introduce Alfa Malik to him. Abeeb is a good writer too, better than I can hope to be.

‘I think it’s ingenious,’ say I with enthusiasm. ‘It’s about this really crazy akhiy. I loved it from the first word.’

‘You know I have a problem with trusting your judgment, Ridwan.’ He’s not interested, I know, but I push on. I believe I can trust him to like the story.

‘You should read it, I tell you. You’ll like it.’

‘We should get back to business now. What d…’

‘No. You should read it. It’s short. Less than three hundred words. Can’t take you more than five minutes.’ I don’t know why I’m this insistent. Perhaps it’ll help to say that only I can force Abeeb to do some things he’s resolved not to.

He sighs. Brother Isma’il encourages him to read it, his smile respectful. Sister Ganiyah is smiling shyly, obviously embarrassed. I feel sorry for her. Abeeb agrees to read Alfa Malik. He reads out loud; he always reads out loud:

If something could be said about the young man seated across the room from Alfa Malik, it was that he wasnt what the latter had expected. Didnt even come close. He was too quiet to be what Maliks sister had described, too reserved. Bound to the chair though he may now be, he was certainly not the sort of man who, in a different condition, would make a fuss about anything.


Maliks boys had confirmed it: the young man had been sitting alone in the heart of the school bar, as if dead to the world talking to and being talked to by no one quietly lubricating himself with whatever found home in his tumbler. And he hadnt fought back when they seized him. He had simply surrendered tacitly, like a hound to its owner.


Are you sure this is him? asked Alfa Malik.


His interlocutor was the leader of the boys, a young man with an appearance strikingly different from Alfa Maliks, whose garb was a white silk jalabia5, perfected with the turban.


Alfa, I no fit dey yarn you lie na.


Auzubillah! Alfa Malik rapidly pulled at the beads of the tesubah6 that dangled from his hand.


Who would believe it? Lahillah!7


The young mans face was a wall devoid of paint, and even when Alfa Malik started to pummel him (chanting you raped my sister all the way) he just sat there, numb to the pain. With each blow, Malik got fiercer and fiercer, climaxing, until he was too weak to continue. At that point he asked for a gun, and it was eagerly placed in his hands. Before he squeezed the trigger, which was stiffer than hed imagined, he said Bismillah8, and when he was sure his victim was dead, he said Alhamdulillah9.

He takes a minute or so to glance through the story again before he looks up from the phone and settles his gaze on Sister Ganiyah, perhaps the first time in two hours.

‘Why did you write this?’ asks Abeeb.

‘Why do think?’

Abeeb ignores her, like I suspected he would. He looks at me and says:

‘Very well written. But I have a problem with the story.’

‘Why?’ I ask.

‘I think it preaches Islamophobia.’

I sigh. I should have known.

‘Dangers of a single story. Alfa Malik is Muslim; he’s violent. So is Boko Haram. And the Taliban. Therefore, all Muslims are violent. That’s what I see it as preaching. I might be wrong, which is why I asked why you wrote it.’

I look at Sister Ganiyah. She’s gotten defensive.

‘That was the farthest thing from my mind when I wrote it.’

‘I see.’ There’s a supercilious look on Abeeb’s face. I regret bringing up Alfa Malik.

‘I wrote it to portray the fact that some people are simply like that. I mean, I know quite a lot of people, Christians and Muslims alike, that are very similar to Alfa Malik. And they just simply are. For no reason.’

‘Good. Briliant, even. But I believe the story would have been more complete if, for example, you’d introduced another Muslim character, possibly an ukhtiy, that witnesses the murder and reports Alfa Malik to the police. Naam?10

‘I write how I feel,’ says Sister Ganiya coldly.

‘Then you don’t write for your deen11,’ replies Abeeb just as coldly. I never should have brought up Alfa Malik. I know Abeeb is right. Everything he said is the truth. But I understand Sister Ganiyah, and I wish Abeeb wouldn’t make a fuss of it. I wish he’d just enjoy the story. ‘What do you do for your deen. Your faith is weak, sister. Very weak. And I pray Allah helps you make it stronger.’

‘And what makes you assume you…’ starts Sister Ganiyah, but I shut her up with a look, mouthing an apology to her.

‘I’m sorry, can we adjourn this meeting. I feel slightly indisposed. In sha Allah11 we’ll continue after Jummat12. If that’s okay with you, that is.’ says Abeeb, and I rush to say it is. It’s okay by them, I’m sure. I’ll bring them back after Jummat. I lead them out and hand them over to an akhiy in the mosque. He’ll help them settle down. Then I return to the secretariat.



Abeeb is reading the Qur’an when I return. He completes a verse and looks up from it. His smile is indulgent. Good thing I’m back, he says. He’s missed me. I know he has, but I don’t smile back. I’ve not come back for pleasantries. I tell him I don’t like how he spoke to Sister Ganiyah. He says he told her the truth. I say I don’t like how he treated the akhiy that led the prayer this morning; he says the brother did not know how to lead salah13. What about the Imam14 of the mosque in my area? Oh, please, Ridwan. Don’t go there. He’s illiterate, and he’s brought that to his worship. And the young man that came to you as a beggar last week? But he was a fake; we all know what the Prophet said about beggars. I sigh.

‘Nobody likes you, Abeeb. Not genuinely.’

‘I’m not dying for affection, my friend.’

‘You have to change, or I’ll stop being your friend.’

‘You can’t do that.’

‘Wallahi15, I can. And I will. I swear I will.’


‘Then change. Please, Abeeb, change.’

He doesn’t reply. I sigh again and leave his office.





  1. Brother

  2. Peace be unto you; Arabic greeting

  3. Female covering

  4. Strong

  5. Male attire in form of a gown

  1. Prayer beads

  2. An expression of shock

  3. I begin in God’s name

  4. Thanks be to God

  5. Yes?

  6. By God’s Grace

  7. Friday prayer

  8. Prayer

  9. Leader

  10. God bears me witness








The Story of a Marriage



Miss stopped doing many things after Master went to prison. For example, she stopped chauffeuring the twins to and from school, which immediately meant a plus-one in my own job description. She’d rather grieve indoors, away from the public eye, where it is safe to be whomever and do whatever one wished. And although I still cannot conclude whether the cause of grief is the loss, if you like, of her spouse or the very fact that it was with her own hands that Miss sent her husband to prison, it remains undisputed that her love for him ran deep and that she wished things had gone a bit more differently. When I’d pick up the twins from school, Feranmi, the more loquacious one of the duo who customarily sat in the front passenger seat in an attempt to capture every expression I wore when I replied his incessant questions, would regale me with tales of Miss’s grief-handling. Today, she’d put down all the pictures of Master and her and Master in the house and after much lachrymation returned them to their places on the wall, on the divider or bedside drawer as the case may be, tomorrow.


I still remember the set of events that preceded this orgy of grieving. It is important to state first, however, that Miss’s job wasn’t exactly the sort that shielded her from the public eye. She was a writer and in addition did a very selective type of activism that is commonly known as feminism and so four out of six times, she was talking at a gathering of women or on television or attending an interview in America. I remember a time very long ago when a reporter, along with his retinue, came to hold an interview with Miss in the house. This day sticks stubbornly to my memory, for, as part of the ‘stuff’ I was also asked a few questions and imagine my delight when later that night, I sat in my room in the boys quarters of the house with a beer and watched myself on TV. It was a most thrilling moment for me; one during which I ignored all the calls that came through on my cell phone and just basked in the light. Later, when I finally answered the calls, it was family and friends that had also seen me on TV and wished to convey their congrats!


So Miss believed that the female sex was just as indispensable as their male antithesis and thus must not in any way be mistreated. She believed that a wife had as much right in decision-making as her husband and that no lady should be abused because of how she was dressed, etc., etc.; and because she abided strongly by her beliefs, she couldn’t just look away when Master, to everyone’s surprise, was charged with mass abduction and rape. The news, to me, was shocking enough, as Master was the most loving man I had met. He was something I like to describe as ‘civil’, and if you’re familiar with the word, you’d know precisely what I mean. He was just too, shall we say, proper! He had lived in London so many years such as the ways of the English had rubbed off on him. I sometimes looked at him and just smiled. I thought he was like an immensely cute lad, dressed in his impeccable suits and black or brown shoes (never any other colour, no; and always shiny). He wore his spectacles the proper way, which was on his nose, when he read; spoke very softly and slowly, taking time to correctly articulate every syllable of his words, and politely too (except when you interrupted his reading). In short, he was the sort of man that wanted things to be done the right way.


The first thing to do when the news came was to disbelieve, for how could Perfect Master be ever involved in such iniquity? For many days after his arrest, I still liked to believe that it was a ludicrous mix up and that he’d be released from gaol in no time! I think Miss believed this too. But things started to changed when live evidence was presented; it appeared that Master’s Business Trips to the UK were, in truth, planned visits to his abductees, most of whom were female teenagers (some a bit above the teenage years) and most of whom he had withdrawn from their serene lives more than a half year ago. Miss was disappointed! She was sad and shamed, no doubt, but I think disappointment was the dominant feeling, for how could it be Master!


And her friends only made matters worse. The sort of person Miss was, her friends weren’t regular people, no. Once in a while, Chimamanda Adichie came to the house. As did Malala Yousafzai and Mo Abudu (even though she was a generation older) and Teju Cole and Funmi Iyanda. These people responded to the development in their own ways, for example, Adichie wrote a series of articles that more reproved of Master than sympathize with her friend; Mo Abudu interviewed Miss a dozen times on her television station. What Malala did, however, was speak at different occasions about the need for Master to be taught a lesson! When asked, Miss said she held absolutely no resentment for anyone, as she was herself appalled by what her husband had done, and in an interview with Abudu, cut ties with him. That day, when she returned home, she locked herself in a room in an orgy of lachrymation, Feranmi said. She had done what was expected of her.


In later months, when Miss spoke about Master, it was with such nonchalance as I had never known before; she seemed utterly convinced that she had made the right decision and could live with it. At first, I chaperoned the twins to the prison, but soon, she banned the visits! Adichie came more often to the house (most times with flowers of some of Miss’s favourite books) and they spoke about Master in such unchecked tones as it was no sin to declare that Miss no longer felt anything. She even wrote a book on grief-handling and had it published on the anniversary of Master’s incarceration. It won her two awards that year.


Then Master was going to die. The sort of man he was, he wasn’t very much accustomed to living behind bars (no, not even in the Nigeria of then) and soon went down with some severe malaise. Miss got a call out of the blue one day at vespertide from the prison and that was when she let herself unleash her grief anew. I shall confess to earlier suspecting that the whole bravado was merely a thick, well-structured façade. What she did, she dropped the receiver and the next minute, we were driving to the prison clinic, Miss practically vibrating in the backseat, engaged in a tight embrace with the twins. It was a pathetic sight, one that made my heart squeeze bloodless. We arrived at the hospital, and even though Miss invited me in to see Master, I declined politely, recognizing that they deserved some family time. It, after all, might be the last time they would be together as a family. I have no idea what transpired inside; all I am aware of is that the twins were returned some thirty minutes later by a uniformed policeman and that when Miss returned, she nodded once, which meant it was time to go. It wasn’t until much later that I learnt that Master had died. His funeral was grand!


Miss wrote a memoir the following year. She picked a very curious title for it, one about which she talked at subsequent interviews. One thing she said at one interview was that she blamed herself terribly for everything. She hated what Master had done as much as the next person, she confessed, but she was wrong to have left him to it. She had loved him in spite of everything and had only renounced her love because she thought it was what was expected of her. “It remains the stupidest mistake I’ve made to this moment, and perhaps forever, because it was enforced upon me by the society. I should never have let the society dictate my reaction to the situation. One thing I’ve learnt: no one but I felt the pain; no one understood it as much; and no one but I could decide on the best course of reaction, and indeed, action.”








Atanda Faruq Obatolu

Atanda Faruq Obatolu was born in Lagos, Nigeria approximately 18 years ago and has grown to be quite a lover of literaure and photography. In 2015, he started a literary blog with his two best friends, and now singly runs a photo blog. He’s not exactly extroverted but he enjoys being with his friends and having fun. He considers Teju Cole his role model and the British writer Zadie Smith someone he can learn from. He currently lives and studies in Lagos.


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